מישהו יכול לבדוק לי אם יש לי שגיאות בניסוח?

הייי..
אני צריכה לעשות עבודה באנגלית ואני לא הכי טובה בזה
אני בטוחה שיש לי שגיאות כתיב וטעויות בנוסח..
יש מצב שמישהו יבדוק לי ויגיד לי איפה טעיתי??
אני יודעת שזה הגזמההה אבל אני לא כותבת לפה את כל העבודה
רק סעיף אחד...
תודה מראשששששש ((;


Nancy roberts is forrty six years old.
For many years she and her family lived in India.
They come to live in England in 1970.
Now her parents are dead and nancy is a lonely woman.
At one of the holiday nancy decided to move to the hotel and there she met friends.
Isobel jones is about same age as nancy.
She lives with her brother henry.
Nancy and jones have got married.
One morning when nancy woke up she was lying in a bed in a strange room and don't see henry.
It was dark and she did not know where she was.
She shout to help and after longing day somebody hear find hear.
The police found out something interesting: there was no miss isoble jones in the hotel but there was a mrs isoble jones.
She is not henry sister, that lie and they hsband and becuse that nancy not married woman.